I am finding editing my own book is a lot more work then writing the damn thing! Currently I am working on getting rid of a majority of was/were verbs otherwise known as the ‘to be’ verbs. In counting those verbs in the 1st draft I found I used them 853 times in a 51000 word document. So my goal this first run through is to get rid of as many as I can. What I have discovered, besides it being very difficult to do, is it forces me to describe things more (show don’t tell) and really tightens up the paragraph.
I used the following website for some ideas on how to eradicate these verbs. http://bethestory.com/2011/03/07/7-ways-to-eradicate-the-copulative It has been a great help!
Here is an example of one of the paragraphs I have been working on.
So big difference right? Is it too much? Am I getting too descriptive? I like it and think it sets a good tone for the scene. Now for the rest of the book.